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Previous Entry you are with me Aug. 6th, 2004 @ 07:35 pm Next Entry
This pain fills my heart,
But all I see is you,
You loved me when no one else,
Would ever love me too,
You calm my hearts storms
And you understand my pain,
You love me even when,
There is nothing to gain,
You stand beside me,
And listen to my thoughts,
Through the saddest tears,
And the angriest droughts,
I've doubted your power,
But you still love me so,
You are beside me any day,
Even when I am low,
My deepest darkest secrets,
Are not hidden from your grace,
And every moment I forget you,
I want to see your face,
Never will you leave me,
Even when I leave you,
Thank you for your forgiveness,
Without you I don't know what I would do.
: peacefulpeaceful
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From:en_nur
Date:November 2nd, 2006 11:18 am (UTC)

Paces in peace

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This is like a lil trickle of water swirling with silt making it slow its pace as it flows. Not in aunsure way but as time slows when you are watching something beautiful.

The only thing that I saw that bothered me was when you said "droughts" and rhymed it with thoughts that could have been worded in a way that would be more translucent.

I also was unsure of what "power" you were speaking of not that thats bad. I just for my personal tastes would have like to know what you meant there.


~B~
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